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Please note: These are the entries for the Pitch Wars season beginning in 2021 and continuing through 2022. Please note that our Agent Showcase ends at 9:00 p.m. ET on Monday, February 14, 2022. Agents will not be able to leave comments requesting material after that time.
PW2021 YA #21: MIRRORS DON’T LIE (Thriller)
Mentee:
Megan Davidhizar
Mentored by:
Jamie McHenry
Book Title:
MIRRORS DON’T LIE
Category:
Young Adult
Genre:
Thriller
Word Count:
66,000
Manuscript Content Warning(s):
Mentions of miscarriage.

Pitch:

THAT WEEKEND x MONDAY'S NOT COMING

When two sisters explore a mountain together, only one returns. Grace can't remember how her sister disappeared, and she wishes everyone would believe her—even the police think she’s lying. But it’s hard to look innocent with a missing girl’s blood on your clothes. Grace’s sister is out there somewhere, and unless Grace figures out what happened, she'll lose more than her sister. She’ll lose herself.

 

Excerpt:

My face stares up at me from the missing person’s poster. Extinguished candles line the sidewalk at my feet in front of the school, along with photos, notes, a few teddy bears, and a blue and gold volleyball. The pictures show a happy Grace, one who laughs and charms and lives up to her name. Nothing like the Grace I am now.

I might normally stop to wonder who brought the teddy bears—I turned eighteen in August, not eight—but I’m too focused on seeing my own name printed under the faded, red MISSING at the top of the page: Grace Stoll. It’s like looking at someone else, not myself. Whoever printed the poster cropped our team photo. In it, I’m wearing my volleyball uniform with perfectly straight brown hair and a shiny smile.

I almost forgot what I looked like smiling, or without the black eye or the scratch down my cheek. Although, the bruising around my eye is mostly a nasty shade of green now instead of black and purple. That girl in the picture, the me from the fall, is not the same girl I’ve seen in the mirror this last week. She’s not the girl discharged from the hospital this afternoon. I doubt I’ll ever be that girl again.

22 responses to “PW2021 YA #21: MIRRORS DON’T LIE (Thriller)”

  1. Hi, Megan. I’m intrigued! I need to see this! Can you send me the full and a synopsis (2-4 pages)? Please use Times New Roman, size 12, black, double-spaced text, 1” margins all around, and ½” paragraph indents. Paste your pitch in the body of the email and attach the manuscript and synopsis as two separate Word documents (docx). Send to: lynnette (at) theseymouragency (dot) com and add “Pitch Wars Request” along with your title in the subject line. Thanks.
    If more than one agent from The Seymour Agency likes your entry, please send requested material to the agent you feel will be the best fit. #OneAgentAtATime
    Looking forward to reading more.
    Best,
    Lynnette

  2. Lauren Spieller says:

    Congratulations on completing Pitch Wars! I’d love to read more. Please send your query + full manuscript + synopsis to Lauren@triadaus.com, and put “PW Request” in the subject line. I look forward to hearing from you! ~Lauren Spieller

  3. Elizabeth Bewley says:

    I would be excited to read your manuscript. Can you please email me your query + the full MS as a Word doc attachment to ebewley@sll.com? Please mentioned Pitch Wars in your subject line.
    Best,
    Elizabeth

  4. Cortney Radocaj says:

    Hi Megan!

    I love the sound of this and would love to see more. Can you please submit your query, synopsis, and first 30 pages here?

    QueryMe.Online/CortneyRadocaj/PitchContests

    If another Belcastro agent requests as well, please choose one of us to send to and mention in your query who else has requested; we’ll be sure to pass the submission along to the other agent if it ends up being a pass 🙂

    Looking forward to reading more!

    -Cortney Radocaj, Belcastro Agency

  5. Hi Megan. Congrats on PitchWars. I love everything about this story – I’ve been looking for the perfect sister thriller, if you will, for a long time. I can’t wait to see what happens next! Please use this link to upload your full manuscript: QueryManager.com/1353/PW2022
    Thanks,
    Joanna

  6. Alex Rice says:

    Would love to see this manuscript in my inbox! Please send over the full manuscript and a synopsis to me at alex.rice@caa.com, using the subject line of “Pitch Wars Query // TITLE.” If another agent at CAA also requests, please include their name in the query as well. Looking forward to reading! All my best, Alex Rice

  7. Jen Nadol says:

    Hi Megan,
    I’m intrigued and would like to read more! If you think we’d be a match, please send a query & the first 50 pages to jen.nadol@theunteragency.com
    Thanks!
    Jen

  8. Penelope Burns says:

    I’d love to see this! If you’d like, can you send your query and full manuscript to penelope@gelfmanschneider.com with #PitchWars in the subject line? Thanks so much!

    All best,
    Penelope

  9. Kimberly Brower says:

    Dear Megan,

    We’ve read your pitch with interest. Could you send us the full manuscript and synopsis to queries@browerliterary.com, with the subject line PITCH WARS 2022?

    Thank you,
    Kimberly and Joy

  10. Shannon Snow says:

    Megan,

    I really enjoyed your pitch and would love to see more. If you would like to submit to me, please send the first three chapters, short bio and synopsis in Word format to shannon@cmalit.com. I look forward to hearing from you! Good luck in the Pitch Wars!

    Shannon Snow
    CMA, Inc. Literary Agent

  11. Dorian Maffei says:

    I am very intrigued by the pitch and opening and would be thrilled to read more! If you feel we’d be a good match, please send along the first 50 pages and fill out my online submission form with the following link: QueryManager.com/dorianmaffei/Request

  12. Peter Knapp says:

    This sounds great! I would love to read more. Can you please send the full manuscript attached as a Word document to queries@parkfine.com with “Pete Knapp – Pitch Wars – YA” in the subject of your email? Please include the query letter at the start of your Word document, and if available please also send a short synopsis (but no worries if not readily available). Thanks! I look forward to reading.

    Pete Knapp / Park & Fine Literary and Media

  13. Alec Shane says:

    Will for sure take a look at this. Full MS please, to ashane@writershouse.com, with “PitchWars Requested Material” as the subject heading

  14. Sarah N. Fisk says:

    complicated sibling relationships are HIGH on my wishlist and this sounds like it fits the bill! Please submit the query, synopsis and first three chapters here: https://querymanager.com/query/sarahnfisk/PitchWars

    If multiple agents at Tobias request your materials, please submit to the one you think would be the best fit.

  15. Molly Ker Hawn says:

    I’d like to read this! Please send the full manuscript to me at hawnqueries@thebentagency.com, with ‘Pitchwars’ in the subject line. Thank you!

  16. Natascha Morris says:

    I love this sample! And I love a good mystery read!! I would love to read more so if you would like to query me, please feel free to upload the full at QueryManager.com/natascha/PitchWars. If another agent at The Tobias Literary Agency requests, please pick whoever you feel would fit you best, though.

    Best,
    Natascha

  17. Laura Bradford says:

    Ooohhh…this sounds so juicy and fabulous, I’d love to see more! Please send me the full manuscript and synopsis (as attachments) at laura@bradfordlit.com. Please put Pitch Wars in your subject line.

    Thank you!
    Laura Bradford

    ***If you receive a request from more than one agent at Bradford Literary Agency, you are welcome to send to all agents who made the request, but just let us know when you send the material***

  18. Analieze Cervantes says:

    Hi Megan!

    I’m digging your pitch/excerpt and would love to request the query, synopsis, and the first 3 chapters of your manuscript!

    Submit here: QueryManager.com/AnaliezeCervantes/PitchWars

    Can’t wait to see this in my box soon! Have a great day!

    Best–
    Analieze Cervantes

    Literary Agent
    Harvey Klinger Literary Agency

  19. Becca Langton says:

    Hi Megan,
    I love the sound of your pitch, and what an opener! So intriguing… Please do query me through my email, becca@darleyanderson.com and include #Pitch Wars in the subject line. Darley Anderson is a well established global agency and I am so pleased to be building a US focussed list in a team that includes a Film and TV agent and a well experienced international rights team.
    Looking forward to hearing from you!
    Becca

  20. Kaitlyn Sanchez says:

    I’d be delighted to consider this. Please see submission guidelines here: https://www.contextlit.com/submissions under Kaitlyn Sanchez, and please put PITCH WARS REQUEST and your genre and title in the subject line of the email. Thanks for sharing your work!

  21. Elisa Houot says:

    Hi Megan,
    What a compelling pitch, I would love to read the full manuscript!
    If you’d like to, you can upload the full manuscript following this link: QueryManager.com/ElisaHouot/PitchWars
    You can specify « Pitch Wars » in the reference line. If more than one agent of The Seymour Agency have requested material, please send to only one first, we have a one-agent-at-a-time policy!
    I look forward to reading your material!
    Elisa

  22. Paige Wheeler says:

    Thanks for sharing your work at Pitch Wars. This is great and I’d love to read more! Please send the first 100 pages and synopsis to me at paige@cmalit.com. Please use “Requested Material from Pitch Wars” in your subject heading. Thanks so much.