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PW2021 Adult #40: CHAOS & ILLUSION (Science Fantasy; #OwnVoices; Black MC)
Mentee:
Evette M. Williams
Mentored by:
N.E. Davenport
Book Title:
CHAOS & ILLUSION
Category:
Adult
Genre:
Science Fantasy; #OwnVoices; Black MC
Word Count:
108,000
Manuscript Content Warning(s):
Death, Mild Violence

Pitch:

Tanith’s a vengeful, presumed-dead heir. Ronin’s next for the Sovereign throne — searching for Tanith, convinced she’s alive. When long-lost friends reunite, outlawed Elemental powers awaken. Tanith wants to master her electrical powers to assassinate her parents’ killer. Ronin discovers a power-erasing conspiracy that could shake their clueless society and anger the Sovereigns. Their goals interlocked, they must choose revenge or rebellion. The wrong move could cost lives.

 

Excerpt:

Tanith was going to break Sovereign law tonight. She had to know who murdered her family. Extortion was the only option. 

On a Citadel rooftop, she crouched behind an air conditioner, waiting. 

Glowing particles appeared a few feet away, materializing into a man. Gloves, a melt-tech mask, and hooded cloak obscured his features.

Tanith walked toward him, shouting behind her own mask. “Hey!”  

He spotted her and stumbled backward. “Who are you?! You shouldn’t be here!”

“And you shouldn’t buy illegal mods,” she said. “I’m your Courier.” 

He gasped. “We’re not supposed to meet!” On his thumb, a teleportation ring activated, glowing faintly.

“Don’t go!” she said. “Help me. Then get your package.”

His client file stated he was a Royal Elite. Of the four classes, Royals were one step above Commoners. Next were Dynasts—children of Sovereigns. The three Sovereigns ruled everything. There’d been a fourth. Tanith’s mother. 

Short-range teleporters were regulated, even for Royals. This man was important. The fact that he wanted illegal upgrades suggested he could be swayed.

“Let’s make a deal,” she said.

“No.”

Tanith glanced at the traffic-filled sky. A Sovereigns Ball was tonight, meaning extra patrols. She didn’t have time for this. She held out a tiny container. He reached for it. She pulled back.

“You need this,” she said. “Play nice.”

“What do you want?”

“Intel on the Sovereigns.” 

“I’m no spy.”

“You are now.”

3 responses to “PW2021 Adult #40: CHAOS & ILLUSION (Science Fantasy; #OwnVoices; Black MC)”

  1. Ernie Chiara says:

    Hi Evette,

    This sounds great! If you’d like to query me at QueryManager.com/ErnieChiara/PitchWars and include your full manuscript and synopsis, I would love to read it!

    Thanks so much, and best of luck!

    Ernie Chiara,
    Fuse Literary
    @erniechiara

  2. Quressa Robinson says:

    Dear Evette,

    Congrats on making it through the editing rounds with your mentor! I’ve been eagerly awaiting the opportunity to check out everyone’s showcase samples. Based on what I’ve read so far, I’d love to see more. Please query me at this link (QueryManager.com/QueryQuressa/PW2022) and follow the directions. If more than one Folio Lit agent requests work from you it is okay to query more than one of us, just give us a heads-up. Good luck!

    Thanks!

    Quressa

  3. Paul Lucas says:

    Hi! I’d love to see the ms. Please send it as a word file to plucas@janklow.com and reference PW.

    Thank you and good luck!