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Adult #33: ADAM (Suspense with Speculative Elements)
Mentee:
Jessica Sherry
Mentored by:
Jason Hine and Michelle Hauck
Book Title:
ADAM
Category:
Adult
Genre:
Suspense with Speculative Elements
Word Count:
96,000

Pitch:

School shooting victim, Adam Lucas struggles with permanent disability, chronic pain, and the poisonous gift of reading minds. Ceaseless bombardment from the sewage of humanity’s thoughts turns Adam into the king of not caring, bending his gift toward drug dealing and blackmail. The last thing he wants is to be anyone’s hero, but when he’s jolted by the depraved thoughts of an unknown killer and falls for the intended victim, he’s forced to do something he hates—get involved.

 

Excerpt:

Carter Tuck is a dirty soul. Everyone is. But right now, Carter Tuck’s filthy little secrets are the only ones that matter, because today, I’ll make him pay for them.

I watch from a park bench, a dozen yards from the appointed meeting place near the fountain. He stands there, hands in pockets, tap dancing. He’s nervous. His crisp gray suit and pink bow tie are irritatingly cheery and preppy. Who does this guy think he is? Fucking Gatsby? That will be my new name for him. Gatsby. His real name doesn’t matter. I won’t see him again.

I’m a serial criminal, but a one-time-only blackmailer. If you double tap your marks, you double your risk of getting cornered, caught, or killed. It’s unwise to keep pushing desperate people. It’s easier to move on to the next one. And there’s always a next one.

The sweat on his face fogs his glasses. He takes them off. Drops them. Quickly scoops them up, glancing around to see if anyone’s watching. I smirk when he pulls a hanky from his pocket. Fucking Gatsby. He wipes the lenses. Scans the crowd. It’s a busy day at the park. His eyes run over me, but he doesn’t know me. Doesn’t know the man he’s meeting.

I make him wait. I make everyone wait.

7 responses to “Adult #33: ADAM (Suspense with Speculative Elements)”

  1. Kim Lionetti says:

    This sounds great and I’d love to take a look! Please upload the synopsis and full manuscript here: QueryMe.online/KimLionetti/PitchWars

    I look forward to reading it!

  2. Colleen Oefelein says:

    Dear Jessica,
    Well this excerpt was just too short! I definitely want to read more! Please see my bio at JDLit.com, and if you’d like, send your query + synopsis pasted into the body of an email with your full attached to colleen@adventurewrite.com with the subject: #PitchWars – ADAM.

    If more than one JDLA agent requests your manuscript, please feel free to submit to the best fit.
    Thank you,
    Colleen Oefelein

  3. Jessica,

    Gah! Such a great pitch! Adam’s voice is fantastic, and I really want to get to know him! ☺ Can you send me the full and a synopsis (2-4 pages)? Please use Times New Roman, size 12, black, double-spaced text, 1” margins all around, and ½” paragraph indents. Attach the manuscript and synopsis as two separate Word documents (docx). Sent to: lynnette (at) theseymouragency (dot) com and add “Pitch Wars Request” along with your title in the subject line. Thanks.

    If more than one agent from The Seymour Agency likes your entry, please send requested material to the agent you feel will be the best fit. #OneAgentAtATime

    Looking forward to reading more.

    Best,

    Lynnette

  4. Margaret Bail says:

    Hi! Please send a query, a brief synopsis, and the full manuscript as a .doc or .docx document to: margaret@fuseliterary.com. Be sure to include #pitchwars in the subject line. I look forward to reading this!

    ~Margaret

  5. Jennifer Unter says:

    Great voice, I’d like to read more. Please forward the first 50 pages as a Word attachment to assistant@theunteragency.com. Thanks!

  6. Marlo Berliner says:

    I like the voice here, so I’d love to see more! Please submit your query and first 30 pages via my Query Manager: http://QueryMe.Online/marloberliner
    If more than one JDLA agent requests, simply submit to the agent you feel would be the best fit. Be sure to only submit to one JDLA agent at a time. If the first agent passes, you are welcome to try the next.

  7. Annie Hwang says:

    Please send query letter in the body of the email and attach the full manuscript and a brief 1-2 page synopsis as word docs with the subject line: Pitch Wars: [Title]. You may send to me at: annie@foliolit.com. Thanks so much, I look forward to seeing more!