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MG #6: REVERIE (Contemporary Fantasy)
Lorelei Savaryn
Mentored by:
Juliana L. Brandt and Lacee Little
Book Title:
2018 Entries
Contemporary Fantasy
Word Count:



Andrea enters Reverie—a circus built of dreams—to escape the pain of her brother Francis’s disappearance, never imagining that the circus is a prison in disguise. When she discovers that Francis may also be trapped inside, she must beat Reverie’s ringmaster at his twisted, magical game or be lost in Reverie’s nightmare forever.



The dining room window reflected the blurred façade of a happy family at dinner: a mom and dad, and their one and only child.

Andrea glared through the transparent scene, up at the moon and the way it shone like a spotlight, piercing them with its otherworldly glow. No one, not her parents sitting next to her at the table, not the blurred family in the window, not even the man in the moon could see her cold, gray heart and the storm she hid inside it.

Andrea stabbed a piece of chicken.

Her mother put her fork down and folded her hands as if in prayer, giving a slight nudge of the elbow to her father. “Just tell her,” she whispered, as if Andrea couldn’t hear.

Her father shuffled carrots around his plate, then cleared his throat. “Your mother and I…We know this hasn’t been easy on you.”

Andrea’s breathing grew shallow. She curled her fingers into a ball, pressing her nails hard into her palms, making mini moon marks against her skin.

“But we think it’s time to let go,” he continued. “Winter’s coming. Your mother could use the space in the garage.”

“—and we think it would be healthy, Drea.” Her mother stared, empty-eyed at the wood grains on the table. “We’d like you to go through his boxes and choose a few things you’d like to keep.”

24 responses to “MG #6: REVERIE (Contemporary Fantasy)”

  1. Clelia Gore says:

    Hi there! I’m so intrigued! I’d love to read more. Can you send me a Word document version of the full manuscript at clelia@martinlit.com. Please put “Pitch Wars” in the subject line. Well done!

  2. Colleen Oefelein says:

    Dear Lorelei,

    I’d love to see the full! Please see my bio at JDLit.com, and if you’d like, please send your query + synopsis pasted into the body of an email with your full attached to: colleen@adventurewrite.com with the subject, #PitchWars – REVERIE.

    If more than one agent from JDLA requests your manuscript, please feel free to submit to the best fit.

    Thank you and looking forward to reading!
    Colleen Oefelein

  3. What a gorgeous opening. I would love to read more! Please send the query and full manuscript as word doc attachments to hilaryquery@ktliterary.com with PitchWars in the subject field!

  4. Elizabeth Bewley says:

    Hi Lorelei,
    I’d be excited to read your manuscript. Can you please email the first 50 pages, as a Word doc attachment, to ebewley@sll.com. Please include “Pitch Wars” in your subject line.
    Elizabeth Bewley
    Sterling Lord Literistic

  5. Ann Leslie Tuttle says:

    Dear Ms. Savaryn,

    The premise for REVERIE sounds intriguing, and I would welcome the chance to read further. Please do send a query marked Pitch Wars with the first 50 pages to my attention at atuttle@dystel.com. I look forward to hearing from you and wish you good luck.


    Ann Leslie Tuttle

  6. Lauren Spieller says:

    Congratulations on completing Pitch Wars, Lorelei! I’d love to keep reading. Please send your query in the body of an email, plus your full manuscript and a synopsis (attached). I look forward to reading!

    Lauren Spieller
    TriadaUS Literary Agency

  7. Kat Enright says:

    Okay, you had me at CIRCUS BUILT OF DREAMS, and the missing brother is just the icing on the cake. Can you please send me the query, synopsis, and full to kat@theseymouragency,com?

    P.S. If more than one agent at the Seymour Agency requests this, please only send to one of us! Best of luck.

  8. Caitlen Rubino-Bradway says:

    This looks great. I’d love to take a look at the full ms and a synopsis. Please send to crubinobradway AT lkgagency DOT com.

  9. Alexandra Weiss says:

    Hi Lorelei! This sounds really interesting and I have a soft spot for circus stories. I’d love to read more! Please send a query letter and attach the full manuscript as a Word doc with “Pitch Wars” in the subject line to alexweiss.jdlit@gmail.com.

    If more than one JDLA agent requests this, please feel free to submit to the best fit. Thank you!

  10. Melissa Edwards says:

    Hi! I’d love to take a look. Please email the ms. as a double-spaced .doc to medwards@stonesong.com. Thanks!

  11. Carrie Hannigan says:

    Dear Lorelei,

    I very much enjoyed the excerpt and would love to read more. Could you send the entire manuscript as a Word doc attachment to channigan@hsgagency.com? Please write “Pitch Wars Requested Ms” as the subject.

    Thank you! I’m looking forward to reading it. And good luck today!

    Best wishes,
    Carrie Hannigan

  12. Quressa Robinson says:


    I already know this will devastate me with all the emotions AND it’s fantasy(!). I so want to see the full MS! Please query me at this link (QueryMe.online/QueryQuressa/PitchWars2019) and follow the directions. If more than one NLA agent requests work from you it is okay to query more than one of us, just give us a heads-up. Good luck!


  13. Penny Moore says:

    Hi Lorelei,

    I’d love to read more of this! Will you please submit your query letter and manuscript at: https://querymanager.com/query/LiteraryPenny/PitchWars


    All the Best,

  14. Marlo Berliner says:

    Really love the premise of this one! I’d love to see more! Please submit your query and first 30 pages via my Query Manager: http://QueryMe.Online/marloberliner
    If more than one JDLA agent requests, simply submit to the agent you feel would be the best fit. Be sure to only submit to one JDLA agent at a time. If the first agent passes, you are welcome to try the next.

  15. Danielle Burby says:

    I love a dark and twisted circus! I’m interested in taking a look at this. Follow this link for submission instructions: http://queryme.online/1352/PitchWars2019

  16. Natalie Lakosil says:

    I would absolutely love to read this! Please send the full to me at natalie@bradfordlit.com. Looking forward to it!

  17. Kelly Peterson says:

    Hi Lorelei!

    I love this premise and your opening already has me connecting to Andrea! I’d love to request a partial of this! If you’d like to send it, please paste your query in, and then attach your synopsis and first 50 pages to an e-mail to Kelly@corvisieroagency.com.

    I look forward to reading it, and best of luck! =)

    Kelly Peterson

  18. Joanna Moult says:

    Hi there, I really enjoyed reading your pitch and extract. It would be lovely to read your full manuscript!

    Please send the full manuscript and a synopsis to submissions@skylark-literary.com, mentioning in your email that I requested the material from #Pitchwars

    In the meantime, I wish you the best with your writing!
    Regards, Joanna

  19. Lorelei,

    *Waves* The wait is finally over! I’m excited to read all about Andrea’s adventure!!! I know I already sent this to you, but here are my formatting guidelines again:

    Can you send me the full and a synopsis (2-4 pages)? Please use Times New Roman, size 12, black, double-spaced text, 1” margins all around, and ½” paragraph indents. Attach the manuscript and synopsis as two separate Word documents (docx). Sent to: lynnette (at) theseymouragency (dot) com and add “Pitch Wars Request” along with your title in the subject line. Thanks.

    If more than one agent from The Seymour Agency likes your entry, please send requested material to the agent you feel will be the best fit. #OneAgentAtATime

    Looking forward to reading more.



  20. Peter Knapp says:

    This sounds great – I would love an opportunity to consider! Can you please send the query letter (in the body of an email) and manuscript (attached as a Word doc) to queries@parkfine.com with “Pitch Wars submission – Pete Knapp” in the subject? Thank you!

    – Pete Knapp / Park & Fine Literary and Media

  21. Penelope Burns says:

    Hi Lorelai,

    I’d love to see this! Can you send your query and full manuscript to penelope@gelfmanschneider.com with #PitchWars in the subject line? Thanks so much!

    All best,

  22. Jennifer Unter says:

    I’d love to read more. Please send the first 50 pages as a Word attachment to assistant@theunteragency.com. Thanks!

  23. Laura Bradford says:

    I really like where you are launching this story–I get such a strong sense of what comes next and it makes me want to read more. The circus elements that are promised could be so fun and I am curious whether they will feel concrete or like they are set in a dreamscape. Please email me the first 100 pages + synopsis at laura@bradfordlit.com and put Pitch Wars in the subject line.

  24. Allison Remcheck says:

    Dear Lorelei,

    I would love to read REVERIE. Please feel free to send me the first three chapters via my inbox at this link (it would be great if you could include #pitchwars requested material in the subject):


    Thank you so much!


    Allison Remcheck