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MG #8: ALL ABOUT THE RUSH (Contemporary LGBTQ)
Jeanne Becijos
Mentored by:
Nicole Melleby
Book Title:
2018 Entries
Contemporary LGBTQ
Word Count:


Danger doesn’t scare 12-year-old Kiki–not living with her artist father on his houseboat does. In order to convince her adrenaline-fueled dad to let her stay with him, Kiki takes up glass-blowing, makes a new friend, and does everything she can to reach a 10.0 on her Rush Scale. But when her crush, Mayra, won’t tolerate Kiki’s risk-taking, Kiki needs to decide what’s most important.



The last day of seventh grade was gonna be something to remember.

At lunch, I told all my buddies, the girls’ basketball team, and my #1 enemy to be at the west side of school after our final class.

At 3:10, the bell blasted. A pair of administrators tried to keep the students in control. As summer break began, kids ran, shouted, and threw papers in the air. Parents waited in a row of cars that crammed the curved driveway. Yellow school buses opened their doors.

My plan had worked. Dozens of kids met me on the west side. On top of the seven-foot patio wall, I stood with arms stretched wide. My palms were sweating and my heart was beating at warp speed.

One familiar voice rose above the crowd. “Kiki, don’t you dare. I’ll never speak to you again. Especially if you die.” My best buddy, Carly. Didn’t she know I couldn’t stop now?

I gulped down my fear. Adrenaline pumped through me and expanded my senses. A male voice yelled at me, “Young lady, get down from there right now!” Uh oh, the adults have arrived. I’d better do this fast.

“Ready, everybody? Catch me.”

I placed my heels on the roof’s edge, lifted my arms, and fell backward onto the crowd.

Screams rushed by my ears. Either the cement or arms would grab me.

It was a little of both.

7 responses to “MG #8: ALL ABOUT THE RUSH (Contemporary LGBTQ)”

  1. Patricia Nelson says:

    Hi Jeanne,

    I would love to read more of this! Could you please send your query, along with the full manuscript as a Word doc attachment, to patricia@marsallyonliteraryagency.com? Please make the subject line “PitchWars MG Request: All About the Rush.”

    Thanks so much!

  2. Elana Roth Parker says:

    Hi! I’d love to read more! Please email me at eparker [at] ldlainc [dot] com:

    * Subject line: PitchWars Submission: YOUR BOOK TITLE
    * Your query letter in the body of the email
    * The full manuscript attached as a Word document

    Elana Roth Parker
    Laura Dail Literary Agency

  3. Lauren Spieller says:

    Congratulations on completing Pitch Wars! I really enjoyed this and I’d love to see more. Please send your query in the body of an email, plus your full manuscript and a synopsis (attached). I look forward to reading!

    Lauren Spieller
    TriadaUS Literary Agency

  4. Heather Cashman says:

    Love this beginning! So much here–I’m totally impressed.
    If you think we’d be a good fit, please send the full to heather.stormliteraryagency@gmail.com with Pitch Wars Query, your name, and the title in the subject line.
    Thank you and good luck!
    Heather Cashman
    Storm Literary Agency

  5. Danielle Burby says:

    The voice here has a lot of personality. I’m intrigued! Please follow this link for submission instructions: http://queryme.online/1352/PitchWars2019

  6. Christa Heschke says:

    I remember critiquing your query awhile back and I’d love to see this 🙂 The premise is so interesting and I really like the sample here. Please send the query, synopsis and first 100 pages to chquery [at] mcintoshandotis [dot] com with Pitch Wars request in the subject line. –Christa Heschke, McIntosh and Otis

  7. Tara Gonzalez says:

    Hello! I’d love to take a look at the full manuscript of ALL ABOUT THE RUSH! Please send it along as a word document to tara@emliterary.com at your convenience.

    Thanks so much!

    Tara Gonzalez
    Associate Agent
    Erin Murphy Literary Agency, Inc.