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PW2019 YA #38: THE GIRL WHO CRIED DIAMONDS (Thriller)
Mentee:
Mike Jeavons
Mentored by:
Zach Hines
Book Title:
THE GIRL WHO CRIED DIAMONDS
Category:
2019 Entries
Genre:
Thriller
Word Count:
87,000

Pitch:

Seventeen-year-old Rochelle has a rare medical condition: her tears are pure diamond. Hunted by a mysterious man known as “Prospector” for her priceless tears, Rochelle has nowhere to turn except the father who abandoned her – a man with dangerous secrets of his own.

 

Excerpt:

In my experience, kidnappings are never particularly subtle—but this one’s ridiculous. A white van pulls up beside me, the front tyre clipping the kerb. The passenger door opens and a man dressed in black jumps out, a hood hiding the top half of his face.

‘Do you have time?’ he asks with a Russian accent.

I know this one. In about two seconds, when my head’s down, the side door to the van will open and the guy, along with a couple of his friends, will pounce. They’ll cover my mouth to stop me from screaming, snatch at my arms and legs so I can’t run or fight, and drag me into the van.

Not happening, arseholes.

I hate running, but even before the side door opens, I bolt. The guy dives towards me, his hands snatching, but all he grabs is the plastic bag in my hand, which he tears from my grip.

‘I just—stop,’ he yells, followed by something angry in Russian.

His feet slap hard on the pavement behind me. It’s a dreary Sunday afternoon and the streets are empty. No witnesses, no one to help.

The van peels away from the side of the road, the tyres grinding against the tarmac and filling the air with the acrid smell of burning rubber. There’s no way I’m outrunning that.

I’m only a few streets from home, but I can’t go there – if this is anything like last time, there’ll be others waiting for me. Time for my back-up plan.

4 responses to “PW2019 YA #38: THE GIRL WHO CRIED DIAMONDS (Thriller)”

  1. Melissa Edwards says:

    Hi Mike,
    I’m intrigued. I’d love to take a look! Please send the ms as a doc to medwards at stonesong dot com. Thanks!!

    All best,
    Melissa

  2. Hi, Mike,

    I love your voice! Can you send me the full and a synopsis (2-4 pages)? Please use Times New Roman, size 12, black, double-spaced text, 1” margins all around, and ½” paragraph indents. Paste your pitch in the body of the email and attach the manuscript and synopsis as two separate Word documents (docx). Sent to: lynnette (at) theseymouragency (dot) com and add “Pitch Wars Request” along with your title in the subject line. Thanks.

    If more than one agent from The Seymour Agency likes your entry, please send requested material to the agent you feel will be the best fit. #OneAgentAtATime

    Looking forward to reading more.

    Best,

    Lynnette

  3. Sandy Lu says:

    Hi Mike,

    I’m hooked! Please send the full manuscript with your bio and complete synopsis (all in one Word document) to sandy@lperkinsagency.com. I look forward to read more.

    Best,
    Sandy Lu
    L. Perkins Agency

  4. Clelia Gore says:

    Hi! This is intriguing! Would love to read more. Please send the first 50 pages (Microsoft Word doc) to clelia@martinlit.com, along with a query letter. Please put “Pitch Wars” in the subject line. I look forward to reading!