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PW2021 Adult #03: WHEN THE LOTUS PETALS FALL (Fantasy (#OwnVoices) – Adventure)
S. Hati
Mentored by:
AM Kvita
Book Title:
Fantasy (#ownvoices) – Adventure
Word Count:
Manuscript Content Warning(s):
Familial death (off page), murder (on page), grief, alcohol withdrawal


DAEVABAD meets (Adult) WE HUNT THE FLAME in this feminist Ramayana retelling.

When her hometown’s tea harvest inexplicably rots, Maya, daughter of rebel leaders, ventures to the capital for answers. Amidst attempted regicide and the mysterious massacre of her village, she joins the endearing crown prince on a quest for answers and uncovers waking gods, unexpected love, and dark family secrets that could unleash divine wrath upon their kingdom.



The porcelain teacup was still hot to the touch when the queen was found dead, splayed at the foot of her bed.

She had fallen only a few steps from where she began a short-lived run, her body succumbing rapidly to its fate, fists clenching her heavy gold-embroidered skirt, legs tangled in the gossamer lining, sticking out at morbid angles as knees grazed red from continuous prayer buckled under familiar pressure. Before she could complete her last valiant attempt at escape—a single finger clawed the crimson rug upon which she was to be found—her body groaned and stilled. Not even the air in the room dared to move over a scene so sacred.

It was a further insult to the servant that made the unfortunate discovery that her blood curdling scream was swallowed by the room’s gilded walls, as if news so violent could not be left to something as base as a primal cry for help. This would require intentional dissemination; an artful address that mimicked its severity. Footsteps hurried down the carpeted corridors, each call amplified as word traveled through the stone walls of the palace, morphed through interferences of imagination and tendencies of exaggeration, then hushed as attention shifted to propriety following the initial period of overwhelming fright.
…all that lovely color now a pallid and cruel white…
…blood splatters on the carpet…
…all alone too…

15 responses to “PW2021 Adult #03: WHEN THE LOTUS PETALS FALL (Fantasy (#OwnVoices) – Adventure)”

  1. Ernie Chiara says:

    Hi S!

    This sounds great! If you’d like to query me at QueryManager.com/ErnieChiara/PitchWars and include your full manuscript and synopsis, I would love to read it!

    Thanks so much, and best of luck!

    Ernie Chiara
    Fuse Literary

  2. Amanda Rutter says:

    I would love you to submit your Pitch Wars entry to me, using my Query Manager form: QueryManager.com/Amanda_Rutter/PitchWars

    Please send through the query letter and the full manuscript.

    If more than one Azantian agent requests materials, please pick the one you feel would fit you best.

  3. Kaitlyn Johnson says:

    This sounds wonderful! I would love to see the full manuscript. If you find us a match, please send query, synopsis, and pages to QueryManager.com/KaitlynJohnson/Contests

    Kaitlyn Johnson
    Belcastro Literary Agency

  4. Tamar Rydzinski says:

    Hi S.,

    I love the pitch and love this opening. Please send your manuscript to querytamar@contextlit.com so I can read more! Make sure to write Pitch Wars request in your subject line.



  5. Laura Crockett says:

    Sounds intriguing! Could you send me the full manuscript in an attached Word doc, the query pitch in the body of the email, subj line containing “Pitch Wars,” to laura(at)triadaus(dot)com? I look forward to reading. –Laura Crockett

  6. Dorian Maffei says:

    I’m very intrigued! I’d be thrilled to read more of WHEN THE LOTUS PETALS FALL! If you feel we’d be a good match, please send the first 50 pages and fill out my submission form: https://QueryManager.com/dorianmaffei

  7. Penelope Burns says:

    I would love to see more of this! If you’d like, can you send your query and full manuscript to penelope@gelfmanschneider.com, with #PitchWars in the subject line? Thanks so much!

    All best,

  8. Erica Bauman says:

    Hi S. Hati,

    Congratulations on your Pitch Wars entry! I was completely hooked by the excerpt and would love to read the full manuscript! If you could please submit your query and materials using the following Query Manager link (so that the system flags it on my end): QueryManager.com/EricaBauman/PitchWars

    And if more than one ACM agent requests, please feel free to submit to them simultaneously—just let us know who else is reading and we’ll sort it out on our end.

    I’m so excited to read more!!

    All my best,

  9. Quressa Robinson says:

    Dear S.,

    Congrats on making it through the editing rounds with your mentor! I’ve been eagerly awaiting the opportunity to check out everyone’s showcase samples. Based on what I’ve read so far, I’d love to see more. Please query me at this link (QueryManager.com/QueryQuressa/PW2022) and follow the directions. If more than one Folio Lit agent requests work from you it is okay to query more than one of us, just give us a heads-up. Good luck!



  10. Matt Belford says:

    Hi S.! This is a great pitch and I’d love to see more of your work! Would you please send me your first 25 pages via my Query Manager form: QueryManager.com/MWBelford/PitchWars?

    Thank you!

  11. Cortney Radocaj says:

    Hi S.,

    I love the sound of this and would love to see more! Can you please submit your query, synopsis, and first 30 pages here?


    If another Belcastro Agent requests as well, please choose one of us to send to and mention in your query who else has requested; we’ll be sure to pass the submission along to the other agent if it ends up being a pass 🙂

    Looking forward to reading more!

    Warm Regards,

    Cortney Radocaj
    Literary Agent
    Belcastro Agency
    Twitter: @CortneyRadocaj

  12. Masha Gunic says:

    I’d love to take a look at this one! Please send me your query and full manuscript to masha@azantianlitagency.com. Should more agents from ALA request to see this, you can send it to one agent at a time at your choice.

  13. Tamara Kawar says:

    Dear S.,

    WHEN THE LOTUS PETALS FALL sounds really good and I’d love to keep reading. If you’re interested in sending, could you please email the full to: tamara.kawar@icmpartners.com, and make sure to include “PW2021” in your subject line?

    Thank you!



  14. Laura Bradford says:

    I love your opening line! This sounds fabulous and I’d love to see more. Please send me the full manuscript and synopsis (as attachments) at laura@bradfordlit.com. Please put Pitch Wars in your subject line.

    Can’t wait!
    Laura Bradford

    ***If you receive a request from more than one agent at Bradford Literary Agency, you are welcome to send to all agents who made the request, but just let us know when you send the material***

  15. Kari Sutherland says:

    Wow! This sounds wonderful. I’d love to read more. If you think we’d be a good match, please send the first 50 pages to me using the submission form: QueryManager.com/Kari_Sutherland_Query_Form/PitchWars.

    Warm wishes,