Good girl Rylee just has to avoid her bully, Sophie, until graduation. Then she can leave her dead-end town and head to Spelman on scholarship.
Too bad her BFF is hot and heavy with Sophie’s boyfriend.
Too bad Sophie’s boyfriend crashed the girls’ spring break trip.
Too bad Sophie is trying to destroy them all.
Too bad Rylee snapped and …now Sophie’s missing.
There are two kinds of seniors who ride the bus: poor kids and losers. My best friend Danni and I were both. If you were lucky, at least one friend in your girl squad had a car, but Danni was my only friend-so we were pretty much limited to public transportation.
“Hey, beotch,” she said, making her way down the aisle.
“You’re seriously wearing that again?” I said.
Danni glanced down as if she’d forgotten what she was wearing. “What?”
“It’s a thousand degrees and you’re wearing a turtleneck. Ever heard of heat stroke?” I fanned myself and pushed damp hair off my forehead. The armpits of my shirt were already soaked and I had to sit on my bookbag to keep my thighs from sticking to the vinyl seat.
“I like it,” she said, sliding into the seat next to me.
“If you say so.” I held back mentioning the beads of sweat dotting her hairline, but couldn’t resist adding, “You should stop letting him gnaw on you before you run out of turtlenecks.”
“Ha ha, very funny. For your information, they’re love bites.”
“Last I checked, Jared had his own girlfriend to bite.”
Danni groaned. “God, Rylee, why’d you have to bring her up? You know what Jared and I have is complicated.”
“Complicated is putting it mildly,” I muttered.
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