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MG #2: LACY AND THE BUTTERBEES (Fantasy)
Mentee:
Ellen Stonaker
Mentored by:
Sarah Cannon and J. C. Davis
Book Title:
Lacy And The Butterbees
Category:
Middle Grade
Genre:
Fantasy
Word Count:
50,000

Pitch:

11-year-old Lacy secretly runs a pastry company alone. When an orphanage moves next door, lonely Lacy must outsmart the mean matron to rescue three friends, even if it means risking her biggest secret of all. Charlie and the Chocolate Factory meets Home Alone with girl power.

 

Excerpt:

Until the butter bees got sick, everything was baked to a golden brown, down to the last snotty-nosed biscuit. Mom and I ran the famous ButterBees Pastry Company. That’s what everyone in The Winding Narrow thought, anyway.

But each day, I, Lacy Lancaster, met the mailman at exactly eleven o’clock—not a minute before, not a minute after—hoping he might bring a letter from Mom.

My rubber boots squished as I paced inside the iron gates. A spider scuttled up my striped coat and into my watermelon hair. His crawly legs twiggled my ear.

“Get off.” I flicked him through the rain, all the way to my stony mansion.

On this particular day, Mr. Oversteen pulled up in his mail truck exactly five minutes late. And this five-minute delay could not have been for a more delightful reason. He huffed up to the gates, wiping sweat from his forehead, belly jiggling with each step. “Sincerest apologies, Miss Lacy. There’s a new stop on my route. I found out just today.”

“A new stop?” I asked. There had only ever been two stops on ButterBees Lane—my big stony mansion and the abandoned pharmacy building. But no one lived in that grimy place.

“Yes, yes, Miss. The new orphanage.” I stopped dead in my tracks. An orphanage meant kids. I didn’t have a friend in the world. And someone who really needs a friend will do whatever it takes to get one.

10 responses to “MG #2: LACY AND THE BUTTERBEES (Fantasy)”

  1. Clelia Gore says:

    Hi there! This sounds deliciously fun. I’d love to read more. Can you send me a Word document version of the full manuscript at clelia@martinlit.com. Please put “Pitch Wars” in the subject line. Well done!

  2. Karyn Fischer says:

    Hi Ellen,

    What a fun premise. I would love to read more! If you’re interested, would you mind sending me the first 25 pages? You can query me at http://www.QueryMe.online/1325/PitchWars. To find out more about me, feel free to visit http://www.bookstopliterary.com/info.html.

    Thanks and I hope to hear from you!

    Karyn Fischer
    BookStop Literary Agency

  3. Caitlen Rubino-Bradway says:

    I’d love to read more! Please send the full ms and a synopsis to crubinobradway AT lkgagency DOT com.

  4. Adria Goetz says:

    Hi Ellen! I love the charming voice here. Will you send the full manuscript my way (adria@martinlit.com) with Pitch Wars somewhere in your subject line? Looking forward to reading on!

  5. Jennifer Unter says:

    I’d love to read more. Please send the first 50 pages as a Word attachment to assistant@theunteragency.com. Thanks!

  6. Laura Bradford says:

    Color me intrigued! I am really curious about some of the imagery here…snotty-nosed biscuits, watermelon hair. The Charlie & the Chocolate Factory comp is fun and I’d love to see how this one develops. Please email me the fist 100 pages + synopsis at laura@bradfordlit.com and put Pitch Wars in the subject line. Can’t wait to read more!

  7. Rena Rossner says:

    I’d love to read this full manuscript. Please send it attached as a word document to: rena@thedeborahharrisagency.com

    Thanks!

    – Rena Rossner
    The Deborah Harris Agency

  8. Tara Gonzalez says:

    Hello! I’d love to take a look at the full manuscript of LACY AND THE BUTTERBEES. Please send it along as a word document to tara@emliterary.com at your convenience.

    Thanks so much!

    Tara Gonzalez
    Associate Agent
    Erin Murphy Literary Agency, Inc.
    http://emliterary.com/

  9. Abigail Samoun says:

    I’d love to see it! Please send entire ms as a Word or Pages attachment to Abigail (at) redfoxliterary (dot) com. Thanks!

  10. Katie Grimm says:

    Dear Ellen,

    I can’t stop thinking about the deliciousness of the ButterBees Pastry Company and Lacy’s precarious predicament. Please send your query letter and the full manuscript as a Word doc to dca@doncongdon.com with PITCH WARS REQUEST in the subject line. Thanks and look forward to reading more!

    Best,
    Katie Grimm