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PW2019 Adult #21: THE LAOS AND THEIR VOLCANO HOUSE (Contemporary Family Drama #OwnVoices)
Yvette Yun
Mentored by:
Kathleen Barber
Book Title:
2019 Adult Entries
#OwnVoices Contemporary Family Drama
Word Count:


Celeste Ng meets THIS IS US in Hawaii. The Lao family’s problems mirror their home’s design: an exploding volcano. Mom and Dad’s marriage is falling apart, and their teenage kids are struggling with adult issues on their own. When a health scare and a neighbor’s disappearance threaten to destroy what’s left of their bond, all their doors – and secrets – will be blown wide open.



Scarlet entered her dad’s study certain to find something dead inside. The flies were the first clue. The second was the smell – like spoiled meat.

She was scanning the orange shag carpet when Allen, the handyman, popped up from behind the desk.

“Oh!” She jumped.

“Sorry, Scar.” Allen held up his hands like he’d been caught stealing. “Didn’t mean to scare you.”

Scarlet squinted at the dirt and dust that floated by his head. The sunlight beaming in through the window had a way of catching every speck. Two flies buzzed around him in a spirally dance, their shadows on the carpet looking like ghosts.

A white heat stroked the back of Scarlet’s neck, followed by a cold breeze across her cheek.

“You okay?” Allen asked.

The hot-cold sensation came again, then another whiff of the dead thing. “Can you smell that?”

He sniffed. “What?”

“Something dead.”

He sniffed again. “In here?”

A fly buzzed by his ear. He swatted at it, and it tumbled to the carpet. Funny how something so annoying just a second ago was now just a tiny black fleck by their feet.

Before Scarlet could bend down to pick it up, Allen stepped on it.

He chuckled. The scar at the corner of his mouth almost turned his permanent frown into a smile. Then he frowned again, or at least his scar did. “Well, there’s something dead.”

16 responses to “PW2019 Adult #21: THE LAOS AND THEIR VOLCANO HOUSE (Contemporary Family Drama #OwnVoices)”

  1. Melissa Edwards says:

    Hi Yvette,

    I’m intrigued! I’d love to see the full manuscript as a .doc. My email address is medwards @ stonesong dot com. Looking forward!
    All best,

  2. Lori Galvin says:

    Dear Yvette, I would love to see your full ms. Please send with query letter to lgalvin@aevitascreative.com with Pitch Wars in the subject line. Thank you so much.

  3. Erin Clyburn says:

    I’m so intrigued by your pitch and excerpt, and I’d love to see your full manuscript! If you’d like to submit to me, you can do so through this link: QueryMe.online/ErinClyburn/PitchWars.

  4. Michelle Richter says:

    Hi Yvette, this sounds great! I’d love to see the query, synopsis, and full manuscript. Please submit to me here: QueryMe.online/MichelleRichter/PitchWars


    Fabulous opening! I’d love to read more! Please put ‘Pitch Wars Requested’ in your subject line and send the full manuscript and query letter to me at rebecca@defliterary.com. Ms can be an attachment. Thanks so much!

  6. Jessica Errera says:

    Hello Yvette, I would love to see the first 75 pages of THE LAOS AND THEIR VOLCANO HOUSE. Please email them as an attachment to jerrera@janerotrosen.com and include a synopsis or query letter if you have! Excited to read more!

  7. Ashley Blake says:

    Hi Yvette, I’d love to see the first three chapters of this! Query me at ashley@reesagency.com and put QUERY in the subject. Hope to hear from you soon.

  8. Sabrina Taitz says:

    Would love to read more. Please send your query letter + full manuscript in PDF format to staitz@wmeagency.com – thank you! – Sabrina Taitz @ WME

  9. Patricia Nelson says:

    Hi Yvette,

    I would love to take a look at this! Could you please send me your query + the full manuscript as a Word doc attachment to patricia@marsallyonliteraryagency.com? Please make sure to put “PitchWars Request” in the subject line.

    I’m looking forward to reading!

    All best,

  10. Penelope Burns says:

    Hi Yvette,

    I would love to see this! Can you send your query and full manuscript to penelope@gelfmanschneider.com with #PitchWars in the subject line? Thanks so much!

    All best,

  11. Anya Goncharova says:

    Dear Yvette Yun,

    It was such a pleasure to read your pitch and your excerpt, thank you so much for sharing it.

    My name is Anya, and I am a literary agent looking for new writers for Peony Literary Agency.
    I am so intrigued by the story, and would absolutely love to read more. Could I please request the rest of the manuscript?
    If you are happy to share it, please send it to anya@peonyliteraryagency.com and insert ‘PITCHWARS’ in the subject line.

    I really hope to hear from you and also wish you the very best of luck with your title!

    All my best,

  12. Katie Grimm says:

    Dear Yvette,
    I love what you do in the opening and am eager to see more. If you think we’d be a good fit, please send your query letter and full manuscript (as a Word doc) to dca@doncongdon.com with “Pitch Wars Request” in the subject line. Thanks!
    Katie Grimm (Don Congdon Associates)

  13. Sharon Pelletier says:

    Hi Yvette – SO looking forward to reading more of this!


  14. Jessica Watterson says:

    I desperately want a project set in Hawaii! I would love to see the full of this with synopsis and query pls! send to queryme/online/jessicawatterson/pitchwars. I hope you will send to me! 🙂

  15. Melissa Danaczko says:

    Hi Yvette,
    I would love the opportunity to read more. Can you please send the full manuscript to mdquery@skagency.com? Thank you!

  16. Johanna Castillo says:

    Hi Yvette,

    I’m intrigued! I’d love to see more. Would you send me the first 50 pages to jcastillosubmissions@writershouse.com?