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PW2019 YA #44: A CAGE OF CLOUDS (Fantasy)
Mentee:
Sunya Mara
Mentored by:
Adalyn Grace
Book Title:
A CAGE OF CLOUDS
Category:
2019 Entries
Genre:
YA Fantasy
Word Count:
100,000

Pitch:

Lovers to enemies + CRUEL PRINCE

Vesper Vale is the daughter of revolutionaries. Failed revolutionaries.

Her mother was given a choice: death by the hangman’s axe, or death by the Storm. She chose the Storm.

When Prince Dalca captures her father and sentences him to death, Vesper will do anything to save him from sharing her mother’s fate.

Even magically alter her face and infiltrate Dalca’s army.
Even steal Dalca’s heart—and give him hers.
Even walk with him into the Storm.

 

Excerpt:

The warning bells toll as the Storm bangs fists of wind against our walls and rattles the shutters with its bellow, trying to crack our little house open like an egg. The humid air is heavy and fragrant with ozone, and my mouth floods with the tell-tale taste of copper and spun sugar.

From the other room comes the sound of a sitar and Amma’s raspy voice, singing a lullaby to soothe the storm-touched, who cower in fear of what the bells promise. The slow, dreamy tune makes the clanging even more jarring, but Amma’s doing her best, just as she has for the last fifty years, running this home for the storm-touched.

But I can do more.

I pull back the moss-cloth curtain that separates the kitchen from the main room and hurry past the storm-touched in their beds, pausing to press a soft touch to Gia’s wooden knee and side-step the gnarled roots that extend from her feet, courtesy of her Storm-given curse. In my haste, my elbow knocks into the bowl at the edge of her bed, sending half-peeled shalaj root flying. But there’s no time to pick them up, no matter how precious food is.

A stormsurge is coming.

17 responses to “PW2019 YA #44: A CAGE OF CLOUDS (Fantasy)”

  1. Kelly Peterson says:

    Hi Spandana!

    I’m a huge lover of storm chasing and meteorology, and I just fell in love with ALL of this! Could you send your query, synopsis, and full manuscript to Kelly@reesagency.com? You can simply attach your manuscript as a Word document, and just make sure to put “Pitch Wars Requested Submission” in the subject line!

    I’m so looking forward to reading this, and I wish you the best of luck! =)

    -Kelly Peterson

  2. Hi, Spandana,

    I’m curious about the Storm and magically altering faces. I’m hooked! Can you send me the full and a synopsis (2-4 pages)? Please use Times New Roman, size 12, black, double-spaced text, 1” margins all around, and ½” paragraph indents. Paste your pitch in the body of the email and attach the manuscript and synopsis as two separate Word documents (docx). Sent to: lynnette (at) theseymouragency (dot) com and add “Pitch Wars Request” along with your title in the subject line. Thanks.

    If more than one agent from The Seymour Agency likes your entry, please send requested material to the agent you feel will be the best fit. #OneAgentAtATime

    Looking forward to reading more.

    Best,

    Lynnette

  3. Jim McCarthy says:

    I’d love to have a look! Kindly send the manuscript to me at jmccarthy@dystel.com. Good luck, and have fun!

    Best,
    Jim

  4. Samantha Wekstein says:

    I’d love to see your first fifty pages! If interested, please send them as an attachment to Samantha@thompsonliterary.com with your query in the body and #pitchwars in the subject. Thank you!

  5. Marlo Berliner says:

    Excellent beginning! I’d love to read more! Please send the full with Pitchwars YA in the subject line to marlo.jdlit@gmail.com. Looking forward to reading!

  6. Danielle Burby says:

    I do love a heroine with a hidden agenda. I’d be curious to take a look at this one. Please submit through this link: QueryMe.online/1352/PW20192020

    Danielle Burby

  7. Mollie Glick says:

    Hi Spandana,

    This looks great! Please send the full manuscript to mollie.glickasst@caa.com.

    Best,
    Mollie Glick

  8. Rena Rossner says:

    I’d love to read the first 50 pages. Please send them attached as a word document to rena@thedeborahharrisagency.com

    Excited to read!

    – Rena Rossner

  9. Kaitlyn Johnson says:

    This sounds amazing!!! I’d love to read the full. Please submit to QueryMe.online/KaitlynJohnson/Contests. Looking forward to diving in!

    Best,
    Kaitlyn Johnson
    Literary Agent
    Belcastro Literary Agency

  10. Andrea Morrison says:

    Dear Spandana,
    I hope all is well! I was so excited to read your pitch and sample – I love the voice and prose here, and would be thrilled to have the opportunity to consider your full manuscript. If you’re interested in sharing, could you send A CAGE OF CLOUDS to me at amorrison@writershouse.com?
    I hope to see your novel in my inbox!
    My very best,
    Andrea

  11. Sandy Lu says:

    Hi Spandana,

    I’m intrigued! Please send the full manuscript with your bio and complete synopsis (all in one Word document) to sandy@lperkinsagency.com. I look forward to read more.

    Best,
    Sandy Lu
    L. Perkins Agency

  12. Zabé Ellor says:

    Wow! I love this voice and the epic promise of the pitch. Can’t wait to read more!

    Please send the query and synopsis (in the body of an email), and full manuscript (as an attachment) to zrellor . books @ gmail . com. I’m looking forward to diving in

  13. Kari Sutherland says:

    This sounds really intriguing and I’d like to read more. Please query me with “Pitch Wars” in the title at: https://querymanager.com/query/Kari_Sutherland_Query_Form
    Looking forward to seeing it!

  14. Christa Heschke says:

    The writing is great AND there’s an enemies to lovers romance?!! Totally my cup of tea 🙂 Please send the full manuscript and query to chquery [at] mcintoshandotis [dot] com. Please put “Pitch Wars request” and the title in the subject line. Can’t wait to read!
    –Christa Heschke, McIntosh & Otis

  15. Bridget Smith says:

    I’d love to take a look! Please send the query and the first twenty pages to querybridget@awfulagent.com. Thanks – can’t wait to read more!

  16. Love to see more of this! Please send this pitch in the body of an email, synopsis and first fifty pages attached as a Word doc, with YA PITCHWARS and your title in the subject, to Jennifer@theseymouragency.com.

  17. Kerstin Wolf says:

    I can tell you’ve done a lot since the last time I read your query! I’m so excited to see what you’ve changed! The concept of this manuscript is so unique and your writing just makes it that much more breathtaking! I’d love to see the full manuscript. If you think we still might be a good match, please submit your full manuscript using this link: QueryMe.online/kerstinwolf/Pitch_Wars